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November’s Untold Snippet!

Originally published at Sarah Rees Brennan. You can comment here or there.

So, let’s talk about drunkenness and debauchery. I will level with you: the Irish and British experience of being a teenager is pretty different than the American one. In America, you do not get served alcohol if you are not over 21: in Ireland they pretty much throw the stuff at you unless you arrive on a tricycle. Sometimes this Cultural Difference confuses and upsets people. I’ll level with you some more: I once wrote forty pages of one character being drunk because I thought it was hilarious. My editor made me cut that DOWN.

MY EDITORS: Why do you keep putting your teenagers in bars?
SARAH: I’m sorry I don’t understand your question. I’m Irish.

This time, my friends, I have gone one better.


Once outside, the November wind cut through her blouse. She stood on the doorstep and hugged herself, sorry that she had forgotten her jacket. Jared in his thin T-shirt gave no indication that he felt anything but annoyed.

“You should be in school,” he remarked.

“So should you!” said Kami. “You’re the one who’s a year behind! You absolutely cannot afford this kind of academic recklessness.”

“Fred Wright called the school and got me the day off so I could learn the work,” Jared said.

“Which brings me to my first and most important question: What the hell do you think you’re doing?”

“Working,” Jared said. “I asked the Wrights if I could work in the pub for room and board. They agreed.”

“You’re seventeen! This is not only ridiculous, it’s super illegal.”

“It’s possibly not the most super illegal thing a Lynburn has done this week,” Jared pointed out.

It was so strange to Kami, how little she could read him. It was like coming to a door that she had always run through before, to find it locked and barred.

“Why did you leave Aurimere?” Kami asked, her voice small.

“My aunt Lillian made me an offer I had to refuse,” said Jared. He looked forbidding.

Kami knew that expression, and remembered the feeling that used to go with it: he was unhappy. “So you ran away from home,” she said. “To become a tavern wench.”

“I’m not a tavern wench,” said Jared. “That’s not a job.” His voice was slightly less stern than before, as if he was taken aback.

“It sounds like you’re a tavern wench,” Kami told him. “Fleeing persecution, you have to take up a menial occupation to keep body and soul together. But at least it’s honest work, though as you labor, many predatory customers make advances and offer indignities.”

“One can only hope,” Jared responded.

Encouraged, Kami reached out a hand: Jared flinched away. He always did that. Kami didn’t know why she kept forgetting. “Jared. You realize the Wrights only agreed because you’re a Lynburn and they’re frightened of you.”

A muscle in Jared’s jaw twitched. “What do you want me to do?”

“Jared,” she said again, her voice softer. “If you needed help, you could have come to me. Don’t you know that?”

Jared gave her that new look, winter-gray and cold, as if he hated her. “I wouldn’t come to you for anything. Not for any reason.”

It took her aback for a moment, the way he could still hurt her just as much, even though he didn’t care any more. Jared turned away and opened the door to go back inside.

“Wait,” said Kami.

Comments

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mitchy
Nov. 16th, 2012 09:46 pm (UTC)
In America, you do not get served alcohol if you Sometimes this Cultural Difference

I thiiiink you may be missing some words there....:)
sarahtales
Nov. 16th, 2012 09:54 pm (UTC)
Yes, all fixed.
elvenjaneite
Nov. 16th, 2012 09:47 pm (UTC)
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

And I thought the last one made me have ALL THE FEELS. *whimpers* *huddles in corner*
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sarahtales
Nov. 16th, 2012 10:02 pm (UTC)
We will, of course, get to see him plying his new trade. ;)
ikel89
Nov. 17th, 2012 11:29 am (UTC)
Agree with you on fanart wantings! XD
(Anonymous)
Nov. 16th, 2012 09:50 pm (UTC)
Parts that made me tear up:

It was like coming to a door that she had always run through before, to find it locked and barred.

Kami knew that expression, and remembered the feeling that used to go with it: he was unhappy

Jared flinched away. He always did that. Kami didn’t know why she kept forgetting.


And the part that made me cry:

"I wouldn't come to you for anything. Not for any reason."

HOW DO YOU DO THIS IN SO FEW WORDS??? I DO NOT UNDERSTAND AND IT IS NOT FAIR (except for the part where I unequivocally signed up for this by reading both the book and the snippet. Eight months is tooo looooong!).
sarahtales
Nov. 16th, 2012 10:05 pm (UTC)
Aw, thank you.

It is true, you knew what you were getting into. ;) Super glad you did!
isabelknight
Nov. 16th, 2012 10:21 pm (UTC)
Aaaaagh! Stabbed right in the feels. But awesomely. I am torn between glee at more Lynburn goodness and utmost woe for poor Kami.
hollyxu
Nov. 16th, 2012 10:28 pm (UTC)
This time, my friends, I have gone one better.

I saw this and thought you decided to drop a bar on Kami and Jared, Wizard-of-Oz style, and was infinitely relieved until I got to the last line.

Curse you for your cliffhangers!
matt_doyle
Nov. 16th, 2012 10:41 pm (UTC)
Got my copy of Unspoken last weekend, and it's easily one of my two or three favorite books of the year. I was smiling about this snippet before I even read it.
sarahtales
Dec. 28th, 2012 08:07 pm (UTC)
*beams*
frenchroast
Nov. 16th, 2012 11:20 pm (UTC)
In fairness, all Americans aren't utterly shocked and scandalized by alcohol. My parents once offered my younger brother (who was 12 or 13 at the time) $5 to finish a bottle of scotch we came across while moving house. He did, and they paid up. I think their approach worked better as a deterrent than making it forbidden; we knew we could drink whatever we wanted, which took a lot of the allure away.



Edited at 2012-11-16 11:21 pm (UTC)
robinreads
Nov. 16th, 2012 11:28 pm (UTC)
Oh, Sarah...I love you, crazy woman.
melusinahp
Nov. 16th, 2012 11:35 pm (UTC)
Love love love
contrariety
Nov. 16th, 2012 11:50 pm (UTC)
Apparently Kami is in fact quite bad at figuring out Jared's actual motivations when she doesn't have her usual advantage at it.

(That's not a critique, I think it's clever and makes sense. Kami and Jared totally have Legitimate Reasons for their Drama-Heightening Poor Communications at the moment. I like Drama-Heightening Poor Communication when it happens for Legitimate Reasons.)
thebluerose
Nov. 17th, 2012 12:21 am (UTC)
“So you ran away from home,” she said. “To become a tavern wench.”

“I’m not a tavern wench,” said Jared. “That’s not a job.” His voice was slightly less stern than before, as if he was taken aback.

“It sounds like you’re a tavern wench,” Kami told him. “Fleeing persecution, you have to take up a menial occupation to keep body and soul together. But at least it’s honest work, though as you labor, many predatory customers make advances and offer indignities.”

“One can only hope,” Jared responded.


THIS!!! This is why I love your writing so much, this sharp snappy humour, clever repartee. I only wish real people spoke like this :)

Edited at 2012-11-17 12:22 am (UTC)
sarahtales
Nov. 17th, 2012 12:39 am (UTC)
I'm always confused when people say this, because lots of my friends do speak like...

Wait. No. Only through my genius can the people be amused!

Heh. Thank you.
mizkit
Nov. 17th, 2012 09:16 am (UTC)
*You* certainly speak like that. I do not know enough of your friends, clearly, to figure out if they all do, though. :)
archangelbeth
Nov. 17th, 2012 12:25 am (UTC)
“It sounds like you’re a tavern wench,” Kami told him. “Fleeing persecution, you have to take up a menial occupation to keep body and soul together. But at least it’s honest work, though as you labor, many predatory customers make advances and offer indignities.”

“One can only hope,” Jared responded.


*cackle*
o_cesario
Nov. 17th, 2012 03:57 am (UTC)
*wibbles* Ow. Jared. Ow. Poor baby, he probably feels abandoned and is lashing out like a TOTAL ASSHOLE. Kami knows better. She thinks she can't read him but she's getting better, I like it. But I like how the banter quickly turns sour--it's like when you see an ex, and you fall into these patterns of how you used to relate to one another when you were together and everything was fine, and then suddenly someone says something and you realize it's totally not. Great. Very real. Fabbity fab. GIVE ME MORE PAIN.
Rachel Hudson-Jones
Nov. 17th, 2012 04:03 am (UTC)
Wait! Was the scene you had to cut down the one where Jamie was drunk? Because I loved that scene. Do you still have the original? Can you post it?

I'm being pressumptuous, but that is only at the thought of not having read all of the drunk!Jamie there is to read.

And then you'll say something like 'It wasn't Jamie.' And I'll cry.

Was it Jamie?

Also, I love your writing. But deep down, you know that we all do.
sarahtales
Nov. 17th, 2012 07:08 am (UTC)
It was Jamie, but it was really drivel, I promise you're not missing out, and I incorporated some of it into Nick & Jamie Go To the Movies anyway. Poor sober Jamie, he enjoyed those events a lot less...
amori_maris
Nov. 17th, 2012 05:08 am (UTC)
How quickly you move me from laughter to tears...and back again to laughter 'cause Jared is a tavern wench ;p
metaphortunate
Nov. 17th, 2012 05:33 am (UTC)
Jared, you total bitch! D:
tommyrotter
Nov. 17th, 2012 06:57 am (UTC)
SCREAMING!!!!!!!
xjessirae
Nov. 17th, 2012 07:56 am (UTC)
We need to ask for a happy snippet guys! At this rate, I don't think I'll live to see 23! SO MUCH HEARTBREAK *cries for Jared* *cries for Kami* *cries for self* Someone help me pick up the pieces to my shattered heart!!! *rocks back and forth*
tieleen
Nov. 17th, 2012 11:10 am (UTC)
Why. Why. Why. Why.

Ahem. I mean -- no, actually I just mean that. (but also, I can't wait for Untold.)
nykyo
Nov. 17th, 2012 02:10 pm (UTC)
Your teenagers character, in a pub, during an angst-ironic conversation, what else one can want from the universe? Mmmhhh... let me think... just the next book. I'm too curious. I'm curious like a little, totaly curious monkey!!! I can't wait to read what will happen next. Poor Kami, she seems so sad and hurted now that Jared is no more in her head. But maybe now she could finally understand her feelings for him. I want to know what will occur to her and, more than that, I want to read about my OTP: Angela/Holly. It's one-side for now, but I can't let fade my hope to see them like a happy couple in love.

PS: Kiss from Italy.
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richyisrichy
Nov. 17th, 2012 05:12 pm (UTC)
I can't wait to see how Jared and Kami are going to have to learn to interact with each other without the magic mind meld. I loved their relationship, but now that it's gone, they're going to have develop trust and empathy and all the others that go along with being human so that they can apply it to their own relationship.

Their connection was an interesting social cheat, but it's still a cheat. And now their going to have to interact without it. :)
jade_sabre_301
Nov. 17th, 2012 07:46 pm (UTC)
I literally JUST FINISHED Unspoken (after having to force myself to put it down last night because I was an hour past my bedtime) and the only thing that got me through the last page was KNOWING I had seen that you posted a snippet on my f-list and HERE IT IS but MY HEART, IT IS STILL NOT ANY BETTER.

Your writing gets better and better with every book! Cannot WAIT to find out what the next one brings. :D
sarahtales
Nov. 18th, 2012 04:08 am (UTC)
Aw, thank you so much! Unspoken's my favourite published so far, and I was hoping other people would think I was getting better too. ;) There's another snippet one post back... but it might not make you feel any better... but I am so glad you liked Unspoken!
indecentfantasy
Nov. 17th, 2012 08:14 pm (UTC)
Really can't wait for this one! I've been spoiled by having 2 new books of yours come out within a few months of each other, and now I have to wait another 9 freaking months! Would you at least do a book recs post (or a round-up of your favorite books read this year or something) for us while we wait? :)
sarahtales
Nov. 18th, 2012 04:04 am (UTC)
I will if you would like! I've been trying to think of a Christmas present for you guys, and meaning to put up a poll asking, well, Revenge parody, Teen Wolf season 2, the Hunger Games, a short story? So that's another option. ;)

I know, no other book next year! But I promise two new books in 2014... Unbroken and the Secret Retelling!
featherofeeling
Nov. 18th, 2012 12:37 pm (UTC)
I love Revenge *so much* and got into it because of your review! But since Nick's First Word is still one of my favorite things in the world, it would clearly be madness for us pass up a short story opportunity.

By the way, I saw on Amazon right after Unspoken came out that people were confused about whether there would be a sequel or when it would come out. Given the ending, it's the kind of information people run around looking for while tearing their hair out and biting their nails. :) Is there any way to make that information public on the book's Amazon page?
sarahtales
Nov. 18th, 2012 07:02 pm (UTC)
I admit I am confused by this confusion... it says BOOK ONE of SERIES TITLE on the front of the book! But while I am not in charge of Amazon, I could try? It's complicated by the fact I don't have a specific release date for Untold yet... 'Probably August' sounds so unofficial!
featherofeeling
Nov. 19th, 2012 12:03 am (UTC)
It's true, there's a ring of Uncertainty about "probably August." :P I think people might have been exaggerating about the not knowing if there was a sequel part, but there seemed to be a lot of desire to know about how long they'd be waiting for the next. Which surely is a great sign!

Perhaps "late summer" would do?
Melodie Wright
Nov. 20th, 2012 02:39 am (UTC)
ARGH. You are a wily temptress with all these tendrils of Future Noveling.
Reading these is like overhearing a snippet of conversation - intriguing and frustrating all at once.
Nine MONTHS?
ARGH.
boojumlol
Nov. 18th, 2012 06:01 am (UTC)
Aargh, it makes me think of how painful and poignant all the Cassel/Lila interactions in Red Glove were. Is this a middle book thing?
sarahtales
Nov. 18th, 2012 06:44 am (UTC)
Yes. Book 1, set up, Book 2, make out, Book 3, defeat evil. It's my trilogy rule! But by 'make out' what I mean is... we aren't going to have the Plot Finale Where It's All Wrapped Up & All Threat Is Removed: now what we're going to do is the emotional work, where the characters' relationships shift on the way to settling, and it's often very painful.

PS I am on the same sofa as Holly and Imma show her this... she will like it.
boojumlol
Nov. 18th, 2012 07:16 am (UTC)
The question is, are the two of you plotting to take over the world or save it? I assume that plotting is involved in some way.
sarahtales
Nov. 18th, 2012 07:35 am (UTC)
Mostly she's just critiquing my Secret Retelling while I tell her about makeout scenes for faeries. She smiled about this, though.

World domination/salvation to come...
chicleeblair
Nov. 18th, 2012 07:40 pm (UTC)
YOU HURT ME WITH YOUR WORDS.

Except.

Jared is a tavern wench.

Tee hee.
featherofeeling
Nov. 19th, 2012 12:12 am (UTC)
I've been meaning to send you a perfect Angela theme song ever since I finally listened to the lyrics and figure out what the song was really about! So even though your (tantalizing) snippet has nothing to do with her, voilà! - Secret Agent, by Melissa Etheridge: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YsCYTRR6l70

(The quality's way better in the ITunes version, fyi.)
Imani Azam
Nov. 24th, 2012 11:34 pm (UTC)
-cries internally- Heartbroken =( *sniffs*
natf
Nov. 25th, 2012 12:06 am (UTC)
Jared gave her that new look, winter-gray and cold, as if he hated her. “I wouldn’t come to you for anything. Not for any reason.

Yeowch.

Here via archangelbeth and now going back to read more if I can find it.
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